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Post by hollysmyhero on Jan 4, 2007 14:32:14 GMT
^i hate when that happens.
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Post by ReenO on Jan 5, 2007 11:40:53 GMT
Hey guys I have lots of exams coming up, after that I have finales and since I know you liked the fic I finished it up here so you don't have to wait for me This is the las chapter I hope you enjoy it Chapter 16 Some hours later Holly woke up. She gasped for breath when she found a big sheet of paper lying on her and Brian. Something was written on it, with horrible red ink, looking like blood. Brian woke with a start when he felt Holly’s shock. “What is it baby?” he asked with big eyes. Together they read the paper… We have been getting along very well But you’re so careless You’re so innocent, as an idiot.
I have been going on well with him But you’re too nasty, you stole him.
I know I’m not a good girl My good sister, if I wished I wished the God of evil would tear apart the two of you let him live a million miles away from you My good sister, how much I want to kill you Why does the God of luck always stay around you Don’t say “we are this, we are that, we are…”, shut the f*ck up you.
My good sister, I’m begging you again For please give him back to me right away Otherwise he will be a half man always. My good sister, how much I want to hit you. Ask you how could you get him and being best friend with me? Don’t say “we are this, we are that, we are…”, shut the f*ck up you.
Actually you’re very very lucky. Actually I can’t possibly be his sweetie. Actually I’m the one who’s made you SCARED! “A-Alyssa?!??” Holly asked with a trembling voice. “You think she found out about us?” Brian looked at her, his face turned white as snow. “Who else? There’s definitely someone in the house, who put this here!” Holly jumped out of bed. Brian immediately followed her, grabbing her hand tightly. They quietly opened the door and sneaked downstairs. At the bottom of the stairs stood Alyssa. Deadly calm. “So, you’ve woken up finally? And did you have a good sleep together?” “Alyssa, there’s someone in the house, who put this on Holly’s bed!” Brian whispered urgently. “No need to keep up appearances Brian Krause! No need to sneak around, you’ve done that enough already in the past couple of weeks. There’s no-one in the house except the three of us. And there’s no need to call it Holly’s bed, when you’ve shared it with her so many times!” Alyssa turned to Holly. “And did you like the poem? I put a little bit of my self in it, didn’t you notice? I bet you didn’t, you’re so stupid!” Holly tore her gaze away from Alyssa’s face, to the paper that was clutched in her hand. It wasn’t written with ink that looked like blood, it was written with blood! She looked back at Alyssa, her eyes widened in shock. On Alyssa’s arms were, clearly visible, several cuts. “Alyssa!” Brian whispered with a trembling voice. “SHUT UP!” her eyes turned to fire. “Since you’re both too stupid for words, I’ll explain it slowly to you.” She took a deep breath. “I want you to suffer Holly. Ever since I found out that you were stealing my man, I tried to make either of you confess it, then I could maybe forgive both of you. But you didn’t. So you have to pay for it. All the strange things that happened? The sweater on the stairs when the electricity was turned off… that was me. I hoped you would loose the baby. The extra blankets on your bed… that was me. It was just to annoy you, make you think you were losing your mind. The soap in the supermarket that you slipped over… that was me, Louise just showed up by coincidence. I hoped that this time you would loose the baby from the fall, but again it didn’t happen. The oven glove in the top drawer, the mouse in there… that was me. The oil on the kitchen floor… that was me too of course. You had to fall down hard this time, it would cost you your baby definitely because you wouldn’t be found for many hours. But then you” Alyssa shot an evil look at Brian “showed up in time to take her to the hospital. The ghost in your room, whispering ‘I’m gonna kill your baby’… that was me. Made a videotape with the ghostly face and put it on repeat when you were asleep. I hoped you would go crazy, and leave my man. Unfortunately you fled to him. Louise who turned up this morning, threatening to kill your baby… that was my work too. She didn’t need any proof though that you cheated on David.” Alyssa’s face had turned into a devilish grin as she put her hand in her pocket and took out a gun. “You have to suffer. Both of you. If I kill Holly, only poor Brian will suffer. If I kill Brian, only poor Holly will suffer. In both cases I will be put in jail, suffering even worse than you, that’s not what I intended. I don’t have to suffer anymore, I’ve done that enough over the past couple of weeks. You both have to suffer!” Holly and Brian both stood nailed to the floor, unable to move or speak. In a flash Alyssa’s fist with the gun in it hit Holly belly. Hard. Very hard. Holly bent double, crawling on the floor. Blood was spilling. One of the most brutal kinds of abortion was happening in front of their eyes. In a reflex Brian had put his arms around Holly, but then he realized that Alyssa still had the gun in her hands. He jumped up again, but too late… “NOOOOOOO!” A deafening scream, followed by deadly silence…… Alyssa had put the gun to her own head and pulled the trigger… _____________THE END____________
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Post by Katie's Gonna Have a Baby! on Jan 5, 2007 23:16:41 GMT
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Post by Katie's Gonna Have a Baby! on Jan 6, 2007 2:51:59 GMT
I have totaly reread everything, and truly you ended this all wrong. I am so sorry to be rude, but what the heck? I mean it made no sense, and I though you where a Holly fan! lol Everything in this ending is really messed up. What happened to Holly? The baby? And Brian? And ok fine Alyssa was dead...I think, but you could have totaly ended this differently. Sorry to be rude but I hated it.
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Post by Katie's Gonna Have a Baby! on Jan 6, 2007 2:52:38 GMT
And you killed Brian. -Sobs-
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Post by Andi on Jan 6, 2007 6:27:40 GMT
I think alyssa was the only one who died maybe the baby too
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Post by Katie's Gonna Have a Baby! on Jan 7, 2007 17:45:40 GMT
Ok, So what happened to Brian and Holly? Still. Bad ending.
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Post by hollysmyhero on Jan 9, 2007 0:11:41 GMT
That's not exactly the way that i wanted it to end but it was a good ending! SHOCKING! And yes it was Alyssa that died. All I can say is OH MY GOD! That was just WOW! It was awesome. Sad but great. wow! when i get over this shock I'll write more later.
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Post by ReenO on Jan 10, 2007 17:02:30 GMT
Katie >>> I'm sorry you don't like it but that's the way I wrote it so... Andi>>> thanks again for reading, I hope you liked it Ashley>>> still shocked?? I'm glad you enjoyed it I hope everyone had fun read it as much as I had fun writing it
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Post by hollysmyhero on Jan 10, 2007 22:46:00 GMT
^oh u KNOW i had fun reading it! ;D
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Post by Katie's Gonna Have a Baby! on Jan 10, 2007 22:52:23 GMT
Katie >>> I'm sorry you don't like it but that's the way I wrote it so... Andi>>> thanks again for reading, I hope you liked it Ashley>>> still shocked?? I'm glad you enjoyed it I hope everyone had fun read it as much as I had fun writing it I loved it alot, I guess I thought it would end....differently. I dont want to be rude or offencive, I loved it, I really did!
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charminglin
A Major Holly Fan
Congrats to Holly, David and Finley
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Post by charminglin on Feb 28, 2007 18:32:18 GMT
WOW, I've read everything It's a great story, and well.. I did like the ending. It would be cool if you told a bit more about what happend next, with the baby and Holly, and well maybe Brian But I loved the whole story, and I'm sad it's over!
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simymonna
Holly Wanna Be
*Hollyfan4ever*
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Post by simymonna on Mar 19, 2007 14:08:17 GMT
nice work nice story
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